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tsunami_rid3r

would this be a nice poem to give to a girl? whos just a friend? who doesnt want people to think that we date.

i care, with my deepest regards
for you i'd jump infinite yards
and yet its so hard to show the meaning
when words and actions are so revealing
you were dreams among a world of nightmares
your smile burns like sun solar flares
you are the peace in a world of hate
and yet i do this only for your sake
i care, with this only regard
why to show it its so hard?
i care so much for you i'd sink
but you're so into what others think

Scully

It's good until the slam at the end where you tell her she's "so into what others think".

luna2

It's neat that you write poetry, tsu.

I had a teacher that turned me so off of it, that since I was a teen, I have trouble even reading it. I'm working on curing myself of that phobia now.

Um...Scully's advice is good. Up to you, but be prepared for her to get pissed at you.

Actually, If she's hiding you, I think I'd tell her to take a flying leap, so maybe giving her the poem is a really good idea after all.

tsunami_rid3r

well thats the whole point of the poem, well to let her know, that i do care but i cant show it or dont really want to hang out with her because of the front she puts up with others. she will tell them WE DO NOT DATE and whoever said that is lying. last night out of everyone i didnt get a goodbye hug. lol.

luna2

Then go for it. You are prepared for not dating her, whether it's secretly or openly, at all, right? Who knows, maybe it will open her eyes and she'll change her ways.

Um...why does she hide the fact that you are dating? Why should anybody think badly of you two going out? Maybe you discussed this on a previous thread and I missed it. Just curious.

tsunami_rid3r

we're just friends really, we don't date.

tsunami_rid3r

funny thing is, she doesn't care if i care. well, tonight i made great new friends, and i just realized one of my friends and is a damn good true christian. i love life.
he put on a guitar show at this coffee like all the way in town, and i felt i wanted to be supportive. and yippy, i got a new camera. so yea, i got pictures of tonight. it was fun.
wow my life is wierd, like one night i'm out clubbing with these hot chicks, drinking alcohol and smoking together, just partying all night, and then sometimes i'm feeling like i need a girl to give me peace and set me on a straight path of commitment. and another night i'm at a rock concert moshing with all these rockers, and another night i'm at a coffee house hanging out with all of my christian friends only to come home to parents who bitch about me coming home late and mom laughing about supporting friends.

edit: i hate being short still, 5"2 is like not normal for a guy. blah.

funkyderek

would this be a nice poem to give to a girl? whos just a friend? who doesnt want people to think that we date.

NO! Good god, no! And I didn't even read the poem. Don't go around giving poems to a girl. If you want to go out with her, ask her out. If you just want to be friends, then chill. If she's messing you around, keep her at arm's length.

LittleToe

Welcome to the transition from childhood to adulthood.

If this is the same girl you keep whining on about, I'd leave her completely alone. Giving her poetry is a real bad idea, as Derek said. You seem to have plenty of other things in your life, so why keep obsessing? Live life and enjoy it!

With each passing year I read renewed truth in the statement that " youth is wasted on the young".

tijkmo

i disagree..with derek and toe

girls like poems..and will be impressed by the fact you did it for her

as you would be if she gave you a poem she had written about you

but because of the kind of girl you have described to us i wouldnt be surprised if she laughs at you

but you have to be prepared to suffer for your art

but what have you got to lose except your dignity...and we have all been fools for lesser things..

oh and quit smoking..its not big and its not clever

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