On the Subject of "My Story"

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  • compound complex
    compound complex

    Someone on another forum asked from what book this excerpt of a story was drawn.

    I replied that it was autobiographical: it's my story. This is from an earlier thread, but I wanted to repost it anew. You may enjoy checking out the link below to read the fine comments fellow posters have made. The pain of a violent childhood leaves its mark indelibly on the heart and soul of a kid, and, all too often, its stain mars the adult child's entire life.

    I have learnt to deal with this all-too-common experience, as well as with the pain of loneliness, unfulfilled dreams and shattered faith by writing and involvement in community work. I am unable to describe my life with a straight-forward method of accounting, hence the following small installment of an otherwise lengthy "story."

    It was not a light slam of flesh and bone against a slanting wall of the derelict cabin.

    Animal rage set its talons upon an unsuspecting, trusting child and sent her hurtling into the air and, upon impact with the splintery cedar paneling, edging downward, painfully downward by a stop-go motion that could hardly be described as sliding. Landed in a shocked but still breathing heap, she lay quiet until the beast left its lair. Once out the ill-hung door and into the labyrinthine wood that all but put the tiny speck of four rotting walls safely off the map, Mommy went to work. For the day. All day. The reprieve was, nonetheless, too brief.

    Liz knew what awaited her and her little brother if their rundown home was not sufficiently spic and span upon Mommy's return from work. Richie somehow escaped the brunt of their mother's physical brutality, however, and floundered like a drowning puppy under the muddy torrent of his mother's loose and vulgar tongue. Whimpering, he ran over to his battered sister, running his little hand up and down the torn sleeve of her dotted swiss blouse as if the magic of his youthful innocence would heal the bruises beneath.

    Elizabeth Vincent, nee Freitas, was staring out her bedroom window at the little stand of trees beyond the property line of her home on Hernandez Terrace. An evil, unwanted recollection of her beloved Richie had been triggered by some lurking, subconscious memory-fiend. The trees, their compact density, something within an otherwise innocuous copse of oaks, grabbed inside the infinite and jumbled mix of memory and metaphor and shouted that Richie had died too young, that he shouldn't have died at all ... not like that....

    "Mommy, Mommy," Andy called out to his preoccupied mother, whose aspect had gone from pensive to dark and ugly. Growing within was an already sprouted bad seed of irrationality and wanton mayhem awaiting a deadly harvest. She averted her look from the seemingly real but imagined looped rope dangling from a distant black oak limb, and glared red, angry, frenzied at her own little boy.

    "Mommy, look what I made for you!" shouted Andy.


  • Heaven

    I am so very sorry, CoCo! No child should ever have to live this way. I need a Kleenex.. too many tears right now. Can't type anymore.

  • compound complex
    compound complex



    Peace and love to you,


  • FatFreek 2005
    FatFreek 2005

    Beautifully described, CoCo. A paradox since how can something of beauty come from something of horror?


  • compound complex
    compound complex

    Thank you, Len, for your thoughtful words.

    Because my parents loved me so much (even the ill one), I saw beauty in their unselfish acts on behalf of me and my siblings until they died. I now feel great empathy for who was my mentally ill parent as there were no bounds to that one's devotion to others, despite often hurtful, uncontrolled behaviors.

    I appreciate that you commented on this thread.



  • clarity

    Dear CoCo, I never knew

    I won't name all those who have responded to

    your poignant story ... so as to not forget even one of them,

    but my deepest empathy to all of you.


  • compound complex
    compound complex

    Thank you, clarity .


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